Hi friends.
In this occasion, I want to talk about my preparation for the Easter celebration of children comission in my church. This was really exciting.
Preparation for the Easter celebration was about one week before the D-day. We prepared a short drama about the crucifixion of our Lord Jesus and praise music practice. Everyone was so busy with their respective duties. I helped to prepare the drama. Actually, I became the worship leader in this event, but my partner should be a keyboardist. Therefore, I must be willing to exchange duties with my friends.
During one week of practice, we tried hard to memorize every scene very well. Initially, it was quite difficult to memorize and performed the play well. However,we all could be resolved because our desire to show best. Finally on the last day of training, we were all getting excited to show our drama and hope everything was good. I was very pleased with these my activities.
On Friday afternoon, we all made the decorations and all properties used for drama. There were some people who made the garden of Gethsemane, the cross, crown of thorns and caves. Everything done with joy.
On D-day - Sunday, we all managed to appear and perform plays that well (we think). That's one story about my Easter celebration this year. Wasn't it interesting? What about your Easter celebration?
hai, Gabriel..
BalasHapushappy Easter....
well, It's good that your Easter holiday gave you inspiration for you homework..
oh, yeah I forget to remind you who I really am.
Okay, I'm risma, your micro teacher of past narrative..
so, remember me, right....
Okay, I have read your writing.
And your writing has good content of the story. But something that make me glad is your specific time.
Your detail time I mean for part of event such as one week before D-Day, one week of practice, on Friday afternoon, on D-Day-Sunday.
So, it likes a kind of journal actually.
Good, keep it always.. and try to improve it in your next writing.
But I have also noted some grammatical mistake of yours. Actually, this is the common mistakes that the students do in their writing. But let me remind you to revise it in the next writing so you can avoid these mistakes anymore.
1."I helped prepare the drama."
The word "help" if it is followed with another word must be also preceded with "to" (see Structure II in to infinitive) because "help" is the word which is included with to infinitive.
So, your sentence should be
# I helped to prepare the drama.#
2. "Initially was quite difficult to memorize and performed the play well."
The word "initially" is placed as adverb here. if it is noun, it should be "initial". But from your context maybe I can get view that you may add "it" in front of "initial" if I'm not mistaken.
Actually, I'm still confused with your context of that sentence but it maybe clear if it is
# Initially, it was quite difficult to memorize and performed the play well.#
Try to check it anymore if I'm wrong.
3."I was very pleased with this my activities."
I just want to revise the word "this".
"this" is used to single noun.
But in your sentence you have plural "activities", therefore you need to change "this" into "these".
So, your sentence becomes
# I was very pleased with these my activities.#
4. "Everything done with joy."
This sentence is just lack the word "is" in front of "everything".
Remember the Indonesian meaning is Semuanya telah selesai not Semuanya telah menyelesaikan.
"Selesai" (your Indonesian meaning of the English sentence) as adjective and "Menyelesaikan" as verb.
So, your sentence can be
#Everything was done with joy.#
5. "Interesting was not it?"
This is the question form right and the pattern is Be + S + Adjective/O/Complement + ?
So, it will be better if the sentence is...
# Wasn't it interesting?#
Well, Gabriel that's my comment from me.
And I also read your last sentence "What about your Easter celebration?"
Okay, as a reader of your writing, I will take my turn to tell about my Easter celebration.
Actually in Easter holiday, I did not like you to become the responsible person who took charge of such kind of celebration.
I just came to the church as usual and prayed like other people.
But the unusual thing in my Easter yesterday is I did not came to the church with my family ordinary.
Well, my brother as usual came with his girlfriend and I did not think such kind of that matter.
But the worst thing is my dad was sick so my mom took care of my dad and she also did not came to the church.
So, I just came alone from Thursday until Saturday.
Well, that's my story about my Easter holiday.
Well, I think I should finish my sentence in your blog because I have already written a lot of words here...
So, bye....bye....
Oh yeah, I forget anymore..
If you still have questions, please see my blog and leave those in the comment of my blog..
Just keep in touch with me, if you want to ask or comment anything in my blog..
I would be pleased to read that.
Okay, now I will not forget anymore.. Cause these are the last words here...
C u Gabriel....
Liindd. . .^^
BalasHapusbeware of your typing. . .
the title should be 'Easter Celebration'
hehehehehe :D)
nice posting :))
hmnnn.. interesting activity...
BalasHapusnice post linda...
Linn.. the word "praise" it should be praised cz it happened in the past ..
BalasHapuskeep on writing girl :D
ganbatte!!!
*astinuraga*